This week I have been using a range of language features to help make my writing more descriptive. Some language features we have been talking about are similes, metaphors, personification and onomatopoeia.
This is one of my favourite sentences from my writing this week
Swissssshhh as the ball was running across the field, I could hardly breath I was nervous.Thank you for reading
Hi Amanda,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your work with me. I have a suggestion about your sentences. You could start a new sentence after the word Swish and describe yourself (subject) before the movement of the ball (verb). For example 'I could hardly breath and the ball ran across the field'.
From Miss Fortes